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RebellischEngel Administrator


Data inscrierii: 07/Noi/2006 Mesaje: 645 Localitate: In my world
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Trimis: 28/11/2006 23:43 Titlul subiectului: Bad Habbits |
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Bad habits
Over the edge and over the sea
Lives his future happiness to be.
He tries to reach it,
But he can’t swim.
He wants to taste it,
But he prefers gin.
Behind the darkness and behind the sun
Is his future family which he hasn’t yet found.
He wants to see them,
But in the dark he feels fear.
He wants to have them,
But he prefers a beer.
Through a long forest and a small little path
Is his lost smile and his lost laugh.
He wants to have that again,
But he doesn’t know any joke.
He would like to be happy,
But he prefers a good smoke.
Over a snow hill, under the wing of a dove
Waits his health and of course his love.
He wants to get them,
But he can’t ski.
He really needs them,
But still prefers some whisky.
He wants all that,
To be free like the rabbits,
But he is captured in misery
Because he has bad habits.
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Data inscrierii: 28/Noi/2006 Mesaje: 9
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Rima este pur si modest perfecta dupa parerea mea, nam cuvinte FELICITARI, esti nespus de talentata!! |
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Maddy Moderator


Data inscrierii: 28/Noi/2006 Mesaje: 1587 Localitate: In a crazzy world
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super tare!!! Mijto poezia...felicitari!! _________________ Please visit my Avril site: www.alavigneonline.piczo.com
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RebellischEngel Administrator


Data inscrierii: 07/Noi/2006 Mesaje: 645 Localitate: In my world
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Trimis: 02/12/2006 14:56 Titlul subiectului: |
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Data inscrierii: 10/Dec/2006 Mesaje: 783 Localitate: wild town:)
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Trimis: 30/12/2006 19:59 Titlul subiectului: |
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soooper tare!!!!!tine-o tot asa si peste vreo 5 ani o sa te numim emineasca!!!  _________________
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soooper tare!!!!!tine-o tot asa si peste vreo 5 ani o sa te numim emineasca!!!  |
ai dreptate...
poezia e reusita....si m-i s-a parut amuzanta..bravo..tine-o tot asa FELICITARI! _________________
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K.N. Sk8er Member


Data inscrierii: 23/Dec/2006 Mesaje: 432
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Trimis: 02/02/2007 22:00 Titlul subiectului: |
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Dupa pererea mea poezia este foarte reusita... ai un talent fff bun tine-o tot asa FELICITARI  _________________
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RebellischEngel Administrator


Data inscrierii: 07/Noi/2006 Mesaje: 645 Localitate: In my world
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Trimis: 02/02/2007 22:09 Titlul subiectului: |
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multam moolt fetelor  _________________ [URL=http://imageshack.us] [/URL]
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lina Sk8er Member

Data inscrierii: 30/Dec/2006 Mesaje: 286 Localitate: all over the world;)
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Trimis: 05/02/2007 14:28 Titlul subiectului: |
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Soooper.Ai talent.
Keep up the good job. _________________
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